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Burgandy is the same color as the rear side of your eyelids.
B+ for effort, D for content
Nobody is going to take it seriously if you can't sort the punctuation and capitalisation out.
Names and the beginning of new sentences begin with capitol letters... so for a start, instead of:
about MA sports
we have been in bussiness over a year we built our empire to bring the sport of boxing back on the map
it should read:
About MA Sports
We have been in bussiness over a year we built our Empire to bring the sport of Boxing back on the map
Also, regarding punctuation... sentences end with a full stop ('period') and in general, if when reading something out loud to yourself you pause, then that is usually were you would put a comma:
About MA Sports
We have been in bussiness over a year, we built our Empire to bring the sport of Boxing back on the map.
... and finally, business is spelled incorrectly and it just doesn't read very well, consider:
About MA Sports
We have been in business for over a year, we have built our Empire to put the sport of Boxing back on the map.
Oh and one more thing, the header is titled 'About MA sports', but it doesn't really tell us who you are or what you do... Are you Management, Promotions, Training, do you organise shows or all of that? Where are you based? You've told us how long you've been in operation and why... but that doesn't tell us enough about you by far.
That's what I think of your main page, haven't looked at the rest of your site but I'd imagine it's full of similar errors, if you want to be taken seriously then you've got to display basic grammar skills.
The site itself doesn't look too bad, I'd consider having an actual logo made, again it shows that you're serious.
I agree with AdamGB, you need to review the layout and look at the basic errors being made. In particular you need to remember a web site is aimed at a target market usually to gain business and most people look for a corporate layout. Just do a basic comparison on a site targeting the same market and try to better that.
Before you go live you should always have someone do a basic QA check for you and then upload a live version.
Good luck.
I think that things have been summed up pretty well. In a couple of little tweaking it can be quite decent. Thus said Andrew, what happened with the e Zelenoff fight? he seems to be fighting another guy in april. And what is the truth behind the history of this fight with the pitbull? Did this fight happened or you really lied about it?
To be brutally honest, it looks very poorly done. The grammar and spelling annoyed me immediately and I left as soon as that shitty song started to play. Just being honest.
Any site with you as the brainchild behind it is going to be comic gold.Quote:
Originally Posted by kid_thunder
I would like to know about this fight/non-fight before I comment about this site. A little openness and honesty should come before the spamming.Quote:
Originally Posted by Nameless