It doesnt look bad for a beginner
Honestly it doesnt
The things that jumped out at me, you dont drive a single shot, everything is at best tippy tap,and you let yourself get frustrated quickly and easily,I can see it in your bodies cant,the head shake the slump of the shoulders,you dont have time for that in the ring. You have to believe your the baddest son of a bitch who's coming out tonight.
This isnt an insult,you have some natural talent,but you really need someone to hone it a bit. Im guessing your self training,find someone whose brain you can pick.You really arent that far from being being able to rock and roll,you just need somebody shaving off the rough edges.