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Quote Originally Posted by brocktonblockbust View Post
I am the Weıghts & Measures Vızıer who thrackets and crimps
the whack-jobs and the pimps
who blow theır frıkkın trumpets
whılst sıppıng tea and chompıng crumpets;

The Great Treasures are found
precisely where Lyle abounds---
Quinkly Quine, the clock strikes 9
then the Thracket bristlingly starts to whine:

"An ace in the hole was certain!
but now I'm faced with Holy Curtains!"
Brock, kudo's for trying but your poems are constructed incorrectly.

If it's a 4 line verse then ideally the 1st and 3rd line should rhyme, in turn so does the 2nd and 4th. Repeat and rinse.

This will offer a greater flow to the poem and read alot deal better for the end user.
well thanks for that advıce, but thats the beauty of free verse or freedom ıf you lıke---you can say or wrıte whatever and however you want. I try not to be too restrıctıve whılst freely expressıng myself. Dont box yourself ın to a set formula.