The paper is done, so thanks for all the help and advice. Everyone in the thread will be CC'd.

Dizaster - you had some really good ideas, I wish I'd read that post before I handed the paper in, but I think I had already incorporated some/most of the things you wrote about. You had some good insight man, you should consider becoming a useless arts student like myself

Kat - I'm glad you enjoyed reading the paper, its not my best work and the editting was really half-assed, but thank you very much for taking the time to read it and for giving a your opinion on it.
I guess in the future I should probably erase my name and student number from the paper before I start sending my university papers out to strangers on the net

If anyone else wants to read it just let me know, I'll send it to ya and you can tell me how much my work sucks.