Trying my hand at writing. Tell me what you think.

[napoleon336]

besides spelling Jermain's name wrong and his nickname Bad Intentions wrong, good article that summarizes Wrights recent career.. was this for school or something? or just something you wanted to write.. just curious.

Just something I wanted to try.

[RP33]

besides spelling Jermain's name wrong and his nickname Bad Intentions wrong, good article that summarizes Wrights recent career.. was this for school or something? or just something you wanted to write.. just curious.

Just something I wanted to try.

good stuff.. i didn't correct your spelling for any other reason than to just bring it to your attention in case you were publishing it somewhere, or handing it into a class for school..

[Taeth]

Do you want constructive criticism or just people buffing your balls?

[Taeth]

I didn't mean that in a rude way, I just meant that there are things you can do better, but all in all it was pretty good. It always helps to allow your personality to come out in what you are writing as opposed to making it just look likes facts split onto a page. Many people can put clear, articulate paragraphs together, but its the real talented people that have their personality manifested into their work... Just something to think about.

[napoleon336]

I didn't mean that in a rude way, I just meant that there are things you can do better, but all in all it was pretty good. It always helps to allow your personality to come out in what you are writing as opposed to making it just look likes facts split onto a page. Many people can put clear, articulate paragraphs together, but its the real talented people that have their personality manifested into their work... Just something to think about.

Sweet man thanks. This is exactly what I want. It's my first article so I need to see where I can improve.