Re: I know this may not have to do with boxing but I need your advice
Hmm.. try this one
No More Drama(keystyle)
Give me no more drama when I hear your name.
Give me no more drama when I try and feel your pain.
Give me no more Drama when the time is right.
I ask for no more Drama cause I'm tired of the fight.
What happened, when we met I saw into your eyes.
It seemed like u youd be one I loved, not one I despised.
And now we're so far apart it's almost like we never met.
Aight U cheated on me, and I was upset.
But I never meant to hurt you with those harsh words that I spoke.
I didn't mean to cause u pain, then when u used to feel my stroke.
Across ur skin when we used to hold each other to begin.
And the nights that wouldn't last forever, but they would never end.
My stroke became a grip to destroy your heart, for you see.
I wanted you to feel the exact same pain that u caused me.
But now...
I shall...
Well...
How shall I begin...
Should I start with the beginning...
or go closer to the end...
I need to go back deep far within my mind's time...
This is real far back so I don't have to rhyme...
If I spoke words of love can't I also speak ones of hate?
but if I don't hate you, why would I speak those words?
I didn't mean it, calling you what I did
I was just so hurt, you have to understand
He was my best friend we went back to buildin blocks
I trusted him, and then I found you locked in his dreaklocks
Between spaces I shall not go back to remember or repeat
I didn't mean to call you that name, or say u belong in the street.
But when u act like a rat there are far and few between.
Snatchin trash from the garbage when u claim to be clean.
But you didn't stop with that pain, for you had just begun.
And then you had the nerve to call that child my son?
I'm sorry but we ain't never go that far, u just a deceptive rat.
He ain't gotta be my child just cause he wear my hat.
alright...
now...
I need to stop...
Before I say those words again...
I'm sorry my words scared you...
So I want us to begin again.
Maybe I'm a fool to take you back after what you've done.
But real men come back, especially if that child was my son.
Let us leave the past lies, and lost love and forbidden sin..
I just want to feel what it's like, to be in love again...
-Majesty
Re: I know this may not have to do with boxing but I need your advice
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Originally Posted by Majesty
I write poetry and I was thinking of doing a CD for fun and I'm a poet but I can write songs but I just want your opinion on one of my poems ok? It's called Angel's Verse(She was unheard) Check it out and let me know what you think or where i should work or anything like that. Any advice would be helpful to me :) Thanks. Oh and your vids are coming, I've just been really caught up with midterms that I haven't been able to continue on them as fast as I liked. Anyway here's the poem
Angel’s verse
Unheard(keystyle)
The screams went on for hours but she was unheard.
The blood seeped on the floor, but she was unheard
She tried to tell the police, but she was unheard.
She tried to tell her family, but she was unheard
You see when she took her vows.
For better or for worst, I don’t think she thought this.
He could turn any white dress scarlet
And turn a smile into a frown
I guess I never really saw her happy
She used to tell me he beat her worse than her daddy
She talked to me on the phone everyday
I guess when her husband listened, she didn’t know what to say
He grabbed her by the throat over the phone.
I knew she was in trouble so I rushed to her home.
She’s 15 years old, he’s 20.
I guess she was drawn by the color of his Bentley
But I’m running to her house, actually Biking
Tryin to stop him I would hear her screaming and fighting.
I rushed inside and she was bloody again
I tried to stop him there, but in the end he would win.
I guess he forgot she was pregnant he called her a hoar.
Kicked her in the stomach and walked out the front door.
She lost the baby
I guess I couldn’t not see what would happen next
She wanted another baby so she turned to sex
Then he tried to march back into her life.
And she let him back, I wish I knew if her mind was right
That night, the beatings start happening again
But on this night, it was the night the beatings would end.
A 5 story drop off a hotel rail.
Came crashing as death took the life by the nail
And trust me, as I say, this story goes further.
The cops came over soon and arrested her for murder
-Majesty
Cuz, It sounds like you killed the bitch. :coolclick:
Re: I know this may not have to do with boxing but I need your advice
CC X for that poem,Maj and Gorilla for the advice. I'll try what you said and I understand what you are saying Maj but I want her to like it because it's good,not merely because it's from me!
Re: I know this may not have to do with boxing but I need your advice
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CC X for that poem,Maj and Gorilla for the advice. I'll try what you said and I understand what you are saying Maj but I want her to like it because it's good,not merely because it's from me!
They could both be the same :)  As long as you put your heart into it, it doesn't matter what words you say. She'll get it :)  Remember, what's ordinary to you may be wonderful to her since we don't all share the same perspectives.
Re: I know this may not have to do with boxing but I need your advice
Ok,I have Xmas hols coming up next week,day by day,I'll work on it,see what I can come up with and let you guys know but seriously,I've tried this before and the same stale things keep coming out!! But yep,you're correct Maj,she'll know what I mean,keep up the good work with your stuff but whats with all the violence and stuff? Don't you deal with happy poems?
Re: I know this may not have to do with boxing but I need your advice
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Maj,that's some deep stuff there man,sounds like it coming from somwehere deep inside of you!!Boxing Gorilla,dude,that is fricking awesome!! Dudes,I would so so so appreciate it if you could write a poem for me to my best friend who is a girl!! I'll CC you for a long long long time!!!! I've tried writing poems before but I think they turn out really cliched,and boring,the same old thing over and over again!
Hello best friend who is a girl
I'd give you a necklace made of pearl.
One day, I'll try my luck
to tempt you into a buddyfuck.
In some places I'm known as El Gamo
I pretend we are just mates
I'd like to give you el rammo,
It's all in the hands of the fates.
I tried that once, but it didn't quite work out for me - maybe you will have more luck?
X Thats funny as Fuk.. you are truly my favorite deranged muthafucka Spot on you creep ;) :coolclick:
Re: I know this may not have to do with boxing but I need your advice
Oh no I can't believe what my eye's are seeing :o
One of you queens writing poetry is bad enough but there's about 8 of you muthafuckers! :-X
I can only assume that vd hasn't seen this thread yet but you all deserve to be sadclicked for you flagrant homosexual excesses.
This is supposed to be the anything goes forum, where we all post naughty, rude and dirty postings full of smut and filth, but fooking POETRY!!
El Gamo, Man listen to me give you some serious advice.
If you want to win a girls affection, first off DON'T BE FRIENDS WITH HER!!! It's the cardinal sin girls don't sleep with their friends.
You want to get her attention, cool things with her, she rings to discuss her personal problems, you are busy, if she talks about some guys she likes make sure she knows that you are getting your fair share too, even if it isn't true.
You don't want to become her confidence buddy, she WILL NEVER SLEEP WITH YOU IF YOU DO!!!
I can't believe you guys are leading this poor lad astray, and Gamo, please mate DON'T WRITE HER ANY F****** POETRY!!!
Where's violent demise? Never has he been more needed on a thread.
:-X
Re: I know this may not have to do with boxing but I need your advice
If you must write her something at least make it funny
Even though we've been friends for years,
I've never even nibbled on your dainty ears,
I've never been brave enough to try my luck,
And ask you outright for a fuck,
I've often laid in bed at night,
Wanking frantically with all my might,
I've only pervy thoughts for you,
Youre the only girl I want to screw,
I want you to know that as I lie in bed,
I'm thinking of fucking you in my head,
Re: I know this may not have to do with boxing but I need your advice
Dammit Bilbs just when I tell X he is my favorite dengenerate you fukin come up John Holmes big!!!!
Spot the Fuk on... :coolclick:
Poor Gamo though I'm kinda with you Bilbs friends is the worse place to be... You are closer to her than any guy will be, you know her feelings and desires.. But you can never get with her the way you want, you will be laughing late at night close to each other and you'll want to kiss her or touch her... But you cant :-[ its a torment that you need to be equiped to deal with
Not a good place to be brother
Re: I know this may not have to do with boxing but I need your advice
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Originally Posted by El Gamo
Ok,I have Xmas hols coming up next week,day by day,I'll work on it,see what I can come up with and let you guys know but seriously,I've tried this before and the same stale things keep coming out!! But yep,you're correct Maj,she'll know what I mean,keep up the good work with your stuff but whats with all the violence and stuff? Don't you deal with happy poems?
Sure I do happy poems :)  But I love to do poems about the world as it is today and the situations in it, there's very few happy things to write about.  Get what I'm saying?
And bilbo, you ever think that El Gamo is doing this out of friendship and NOT because he wants to sleep with her?
Re: I know this may not have to do with boxing but I need your advice
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Originally Posted by Majesty
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Originally Posted by El Gamo
Ok,I have Xmas hols coming up next week,day by day,I'll work on it,see what I can come up with and let you guys know but seriously,I've tried this before and the same stale things keep coming out!! But yep,you're correct Maj,she'll know what I mean,keep up the good work with your stuff but whats with all the violence and stuff? Don't you deal with happy poems?
And bilbo, you ever think that El Gamo is doing this out of friendship and NOT because he wants to sleep with her?
What would be the point of that? That would be like doing volunteer work, where's the reward?
???
Re: I know this may not have to do with boxing but I need your advice
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I came to this country without a passport.
Ever since then I've been hunted and sought.
My little white grains are nothing but waste,
soft and deadly and bitter to taste
But I'm a world of power, and you'll know it too.
I can make a mere schoolboy forget his books,
I can make a world famous beauty neglect her looks,
I can make a good man forsake his wife
Send a greedy man to prison for the rest of his life.
I can make a man forsake his country and flag
Make a girl sell her body for a five-pound bag.
Some think my adventures of joyin' are thrilling
But I'll put a gun in your hand and make you kill'em.
In cellophane bags I've found my way
to heads of state, and to children at play.
I'm financed in China, ran in Japan
I'm respected in Turkey and I'm legal in Siam.
I take my addicts and make them steal, borrow and beg
Then search for a vein in an arm or a leg.
So, be you Italian, Jewish, black or Mex
I make the most virile of men forget their sex.
So now my man, you listen, you'll do your best
To keep up your habit until your arrest.....
Now the police have taken you from under my wing
Do you think they will identify me, I who an King?
Now you must lie in that filthy jail
Where I can't get to you by visit or mail.
So seek one with this comfort: we're gonna cough
Six days of madness, you might throw me off.
Curse me in name, defy me in speech -
But you'd use me right now, were I in your reach.
Throughout your sentence, reserved to your fate.
Fear not young man or woman. I'll be waiting at the gate.
And don't be afraid, don't run - I'm not chaste.
Sure, My name is Heroin, you'll come for a taste
Behold, you're hooked
Your foot's in the stirrup and you're making haste
Mount the steed and ride him well
For the White Horse of Heroin will ride you to Hell.
:-[
Hmmm... thats a very orininal poem ;D
You should call this poem King Heroin ;)
Just a suggestion.... James :P
Re: I know this may not have to do with boxing but I need your advice
Okay sorry, im just hatin coz no1 is boastin my shiz ???
Man, i worte that on the spot gosh darn it! >:mad ::**
Re: I know this may not have to do with boxing but I need your advice
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Originally Posted by JT Rock
Dammit Bilbs just when I tell X he is my favorite dengenerate you fukin come up John Holmes big!!!!
Spot the Fuk on... :coolclick:
Poor Gamo though I'm kinda with you Bilbs friends is the worse place to be... You are closer to her than any guy will be, you know her feelings and desires.. But you can never get with her the way you want, you will be laughing late at night close to each other and you'll want to kiss her or touch her... But you cant :-[ its a torment that you need to be equiped to deal with
Not a good place to be brother
El Gamo in the words of the GREAT LIL JOHN hope this helps:
-ive been knowin ya for a long time..... but F*ckin never crossed my mind.......but tonight i see something in ya that make me wanna get with ya, u might never been nothing but a friend to me....up in here huggin squeezin touchin.. up in the bath tub rub n dub n...are u sure you wanna go this route? let a n*gga know before I pull it out...i would never ever cross the line.. shorty let me hear you tell me one more time, one more time... tell me again that we'll be lovers than friends.......
Re: I know this may not have to do with boxing but I need your advice
Ok,i've been a here,close to 7,000 posts and this is P4P one of my favourite threads ever!! Ok.......
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Originally Posted by bilbo
Oh no I can't believe what my eye's are seeing :o
One of you queens writing poetry is bad enough but there's about 8 of you muthafuckers! :-X
I can only assume that vd hasn't seen this thread yet but you all deserve to be sadclicked for you flagrant homosexual excesses.
This is supposed to be the anything goes forum, where we all post naughty, rude and dirty postings full of smut and filth, but fooking POETRY!!
El Gamo, Man listen to me give you some serious advice.
If you want to win a girls affection, first off DON'T BE FRIENDS WITH HER!!! It's the cardinal sin girls don't sleep with their friends.
You want to get her attention, cool things with her, she rings to discuss her personal problems, you are busy, if she talks about some guys she likes make sure she knows that you are getting your fair share too, even if it isn't true.
You don't want to become her confidence buddy, she WILL NEVER SLEEP WITH YOU IF YOU DO!!!
I can't believe you guys are leading this poor lad astray, and Gamo, please mate DON'T WRITE HER ANY F****** POETRY!!!
Where's violent demise? Never has he been more needed on a thread.
:-X
LMAO!!! Dudeeee, I've had a few girls in my time and there is nothing worng with poetry!!LMAO!!! You make it out to be some gay sex act or something sordid and dirty!! It's actually really cool! Plus,I'm sure I've been out with a girl that was a friend before like when I was 18 or something!
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Originally Posted by JT Rock
Dammit Bilbs just when I tell X he is my favorite dengenerate you fukin come up John Holmes big!!!!
Spot the Fuk on... :coolclick:
Poor Gamo though I'm kinda with you Bilbs friends is the worse place to be... You are closer to her than any guy will be, you know her feelings and desires.. But you can never get with her the way you want, you will be laughing late at night close to each other and you'll want to kiss her or touch her... But you cant :-[ its a torment that you need to be equiped to deal with
Not a good place to be brother
Man,JT,you took the words out of my mouth!! And I know it sounds gay and stuff but I'm not after any sex,that;s not me with this girl,I can get that from any other girl,It's just she's the nicest,sweetest,coolest,most perfect girl I've ever met! She already likes someone else though so I guess I'll just have to tighten up my balls and be her best friend....I'd still like to write a poem for her though,it would be fun~! You sound like you have been there JT,what was it like? Did you tell her? I'm not going to tell her,would just complicate things.
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Originally Posted by El Gamo
Ok,I have Xmas hols coming up next week,day by day,I'll work on it,see what I can come up with and let you guys know but seriously,I've tried this before and the same stale things keep coming out!! But yep,you're correct Maj,she'll know what I mean,keep up the good work with your stuff but whats with all the violence and stuff? Don't you deal with happy poems?
Sure I do happy poems :) But I love to do poems about the world as it is today and the situations in it, there's very few happy things to write about. Get what I'm saying?
And bilbo, you ever think that El Gamo is doing this out of friendship and NOT because he wants to sleep with her?
Yea bro,I see where you are coming from,you want to make realistic poems,reflections of the world and society today right>? And you're correct,I'm not doing this to sleep with her,hell no! I'm doing it because I care for her and I want show her that through a poem and because she's my best friend!
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Originally Posted by bilbo
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Originally Posted by Majesty
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Originally Posted by El Gamo
Ok,I have Xmas hols coming up next week,day by day,I'll work on it,see what I can come up with and let you guys know but seriously,I've tried this before and the same stale things keep coming out!! But yep,you're correct Maj,she'll know what I mean,keep up the good work with your stuff but whats with all the violence and stuff? Don't you deal with happy poems?
And bilbo, you ever think that El Gamo is doing this out of friendship and NOT because he wants to sleep with her?
What would be the point of that? That would be like doing volunteer work, where's the reward?
???
Oh my gosh,I've never laughed so hard in my life!! You're a crooked bastard aren't you !! LOL
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Originally Posted by TheBESTP4P
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Originally Posted by JT Rock
Dammit Bilbs just when I tell X he is my favorite dengenerate you fukin come up John Holmes big!!!!
Spot the Fuk on... :coolclick:
Poor Gamo though I'm kinda with you Bilbs friends is the worse place to be... You are closer to her than any guy will be, you know her feelings and desires.. But you can never get with her the way you want, you will be laughing late at night close to each other and you'll want to kiss her or touch her... But you cant :-[ its a torment that you need to be equiped to deal with
Not a good place to be brother
El Gamo in the words of the GREAT LIL JOHN hope this helps:
-ive been knowin ya for a long time..... but F*ckin never crossed my mind.......but tonight i see something in ya that make me wanna get with ya, u might never been nothing but a friend to me....up in here huggin squeezin touchin.. up in the bath tub rub n dub n...are u sure you wanna go this route? let a n*gga know before I pull it out...i would never ever cross the line.. shorty let me hear you tell me one more time, one more time... tell me again that we'll be lovers than friends.......
I actually like the song and listen to it alot but that dude spoils it#! It's like a mellow relaxed tune then he comes in with his loud ass mouth,totally out of place although am fan of his other stuff!!
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Originally Posted by The Grinch
Okay sorry, im just hatin coz no1 is boastin my shiz ???
Man, i worte that on the spot gosh darn it! >:mad ::**
LOL,have a cc from me! In fact,CC's on me for this awesome thread!
