I write poetry and I was thinking of doing a CD for fun and I'm a poet but I can write songs but I just want your opinion on one of my poems ok? It's called Angel's Verse(She was unheard) Check it out and let me know what you think or where i should work or anything like that. Any advice would be helpful to me Thanks. Oh and your vids are coming, I've just been really caught up with midterms that I haven't been able to continue on them as fast as I liked. Anyway here's the poem

Angel’s verse

Unheard(keystyle)

The screams went on for hours but she was unheard.
The blood seeped on the floor, but she was unheard
She tried to tell the police, but she was unheard.
She tried to tell her family, but she was unheard
You see when she took her vows.
For better or for worst, I don’t think she thought this.
He could turn any white dress scarlet
And turn a smile into a frown
I guess I never really saw her happy
She used to tell me he beat her worse than her daddy
She talked to me on the phone everyday
I guess when her husband listened, she didn’t know what to say
He grabbed her by the throat over the phone.
I knew she was in trouble so I rushed to her home.
She’s 15 years old, he’s 20.
I guess she was drawn by the color of his Bentley
But I’m running to her house, actually Biking
Tryin to stop him I would hear her screaming and fighting.
I rushed inside and she was bloody again
I tried to stop him there, but in the end he would win.
I guess he forgot she was pregnant he called her a hoar.
Kicked her in the stomach and walked out the front door.
She lost the baby
I guess I couldn’t not see what would happen next
She wanted another baby so she turned to sex
Then he tried to march back into her life.
And she let him back, I wish I knew if her mind was right
That night, the beatings start happening again
But on this night, it was the night the beatings would end.
A 5 story drop off a hotel rail.
Came crashing as death took the life by the nail
And trust me, as I say, this story goes further.
The cops came over soon and arrested her for murder

-Majesty